A Dream(Tribute to the Soldiers) created by RenesmeeWolf 14 years ago

He wrote in the letter that she had
Everything that she has dreaded
Ever since they were younger than this
She knew his time would come
And even with a girl on the way
She's praying hard, that he'll be safe
And when she's lonely, she slowly reads
The note, that he left for her
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Dear truest love, i've gone away
It was my time, to go protect
Those who need help, and our country
So please don't worry, I'll be okay
I will return, i promise that
And tell my baby girl, I'll see her soon
I'll love you always, I won't forget you
from your truest love, I'll see you soon
She sets down the letter he wrote
After a few more months
Her baby girl is in her arms
She just looks so much like him.
Her lonely nights, staring at the ceiling
In an empty bed
Her heart is all the way across
The big wide ocean
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Two years pass, and no word
She realized, he won't return
But then a knock rasps on the door
And sitting there, on the ground
Was another note.
She slowly picks it up,
And sees the familliar words
Tears flow down her cheeks
But these are not tears of sadness
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And there he is smiling at her,
and the baby girl too
"Daddy!" She cries aloud
And she smiles back.
Shares a hug and a kiss
with the ones he loves
And only then, she knows
It's not a dream.
The poem is very deep and beautiful.I agree with 89Ford, you need to make the vocal part more audible.You are very good with the concept for a song and as an instrumentalist,take care of the vocal part,it does need adjustment,make it louder,fuller, varied, less timid.Great song overall.
Lol thanks :)) Yeah I'll work on that :)
Nice work! =) ur off beat but the lyrics are good.
sure hear my song. Little Braiden. lol I'm still a noob.
Okay cool thanks :)
I think a intro that starts the song without singing, let the song start, then start singing on the second bar, you're not bad, just need some encouragement and a second set of ears to help you out. I think if you take out the 4 dimensional warm pad at the 4th bar, and add maybe a different warm pad in the 5th bar to take it's place, we might get to hear more of your voice.
Lol but thanks about the lyrics
I am? lol